Neji, I want More: Most be revised or deleted.

Title: Neji, I want More
Author: XxhelloworldxX
Fandom: Naruto
1st character: Neji Hyuuga
2nd character: Tenten
Rating: Rated T
Summary: What can I say ? Read it, there's chocolate involved.
Recieved Review:

Dear XxHelloworldxX,

Let me begin by telling you that your story happens to be extremely ooc...

I read your reviews and it concerns me that you even review your own story. It's by far the most... eccentric and probably the most pathetic thing that I have seen an author do.

You do know that you can actually just reply using a pm? Why bother readers or reviewers with review replies that aren't even intended for them.

So here I am... Reviewing your fic. Your bratty attitude has caught my eye and trust me I'm not feeling it.

The first part of your story, specifically, "I want more Neji! Give me more!... etc..." And the like was a bit random and quite stupid if you ask me. Knowing Tenten, I don't think she would actually shout something something so vulgar as that.Neji is extremely ooc if you ask me.

And when Tenten said, "But the Hyuuga family are rich, filthy rich" She sounded like some gold-digger. Personally, I don't really mind, because I have this dislike for the girl but story-wise, it's not working.

You don't use proper punctuation and the sentence was suppose to be written as, "But the Hyuugas are rich, filthy rich."

You should say who's talking and who's not listening because it's way confusing.The way Neji begins the dramatic part of this story was way off because of two things... Neji Hyuuga is anything but dramatic and Neji actually talking about his family as freely as this is so rare that it never happens!

And the way you treat Sakura in this fic was really harsh, it's beginning to piss me off. You hate fangirls don't you? Well, let me tell you one thing. All of us have fangirl moments. I have read your profile and trust me you're a fangirl too, so fuck off Sakura.

Oh my god. Neji actually saying the words, "All done, baby." He sounded like some sexually frustrated maniac.

Please revise this or better yet delete it. It's one of the most disgracing fics I have ever read. No wonder I hate NejiTenten pairings.

And don't reply to me saying, "Everybody else said it was good so piss off." Ahha. Don't make me laugh. The review they give are either "OMG dat waz so amezing!111" or "aw...how sweet!IK think Neji is just a wee bit OCC just a little but I love it!" If they say your story was the best... I suggest you don't listen to them and act like some writing goddess when you're nothing. You'll just end up embarassing yourself and continue filling this fandom up with trash.

If you think this is the end of my so-called flames to your story... think again. I have been born with the gift of having patience when it comes to stories that have been poorly written and believe me when I say that these big mistakes have caught my eye and I'm not willing to forget about it. I'm not some idiot who flames random people. I actually have a life and in this life I plan on helping the Naruto fandom by removing all the useless fictions that has been collecting ever since the start of time and I flame people because they deserve it not because I find it fun.

Wishing you all the luck you can get,
Interaction.

Other comments/reactions:

She has a distaste for Sakura which I'm not entirely happy about. Sakura is one of my most favorite characters and she tends to overdo the fangirl moments of the pink-haired girl. She lacks proper punctuation and grammar. Worst of all, this girl has an attitude that I dislike most of all. She has to face the fact that she just made an extremely ooc story but she totally denies it.

Message to the author: If you're reading this, be glad that I have become mildly soft on you but the next time... you're toast my dear. And trust me, the flame I gave you a while ago wasn't half of what I can do. So either improve your writing or you'll have to deal with me for the rest of your career in fanfiction.net or you can just quit.